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Authors note: Okay I dont care what you say just post comments
Lewis sat in the dark library waiting. Lewis was a man of business, he would do anything to come out on top. Lewis always wore a black tuxedo, he had beady Hazle eyes and gray hair that was styled like a buzz cut. Then the door opened and Miss. and Mr. Pearl. Mr Pearl was a blind middle age man with dark black hair. Miss Pearl wore a dark red long sleeve dress that looked like spider webs. She had light brown hair and dark green eyes. Both sat at the table Lewis cleared his throat and began "I need you to kill someone for me". This message was edited by Animegurl on May 24 2009. This message was edited by Animegurl on May 27 2009. ------------------- ![]() CLICK THIS LINK OR DIE | |
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Animegurl
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Chapter One L&L The Child Mafia A maid poured some tea into Misses Pearl's cup and Mr Pearls Cup and left. Misses Pearl smiled "Who do want to be killed?" She asked "Krey Von Del, He is my co-worker Alan's son, because Alan is very good friends with my boss and my boss is retiring next month Alan will become the boss and that means I cant because I know he'll hand the company over to his son" Lewis told Misses pearl. "How old is Mr. Von Del?" Mr Pearl asked "15" Lewis replied. Mr. Pearl sipped his tea and finished "Neither me or my wife can kill this boy, He's to young". "If you really want him to die the price is much to high for you anyway" Misses pearl told Lewis "No price is to high!" Lewis yelled Misses pearl Grinned in an evil way "Come with me" Misses pearl replied finally. She lead Lewis down a long hall way with many painted pictures of two child but both faces were covered with masks in each picture. Finally at the end of the hall was a dark red door. When Misses pearl opened it, all that was inside it was a huge pile of stuffed animals that either were missing: an arm, head, leg, or ear in front of the giant pile was a little boy wearing black Pajama pants and a black shirt that had a pink bunny head logo on it, he was chewing on a pink bunny rabbit plush toy's arm. In back of him was a girl sitting a big chair that looked like the kind a king would sit in around the girl were hundreds of books stacked like walls around the girl except for the front of her body. She wore a purple Vail that matched her dress that was Blood red and had a ribbon across her waist. she had blackish Brown hair that was in a pony tail her face looked just like a doll she had big eyes and a small mouth. It looked as though she was reading a book called "the day the earth stood still" Her face was buried in the book. "This Is L&L the child Mafia" Misses Pearl told Lewis "So..So these are Vampires?!" He yelled with amazement. This message was edited by Animegurl on May 20 2009. ------------------- ![]() CLICK THIS LINK OR DIE | |
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Animegurl
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L and L make a deal Lewis Stared at the children in amazement. It only took the girl a while to realize that a man she did not know came in the room. She started at him with her dark blue eyes. She laughed and threw the book she was reading on the ground and smiled. Soon the little boy saw the man, He started him just as his sister did but as though this man was a murder who could easily get rid of him. The little boy took his Bunny rabbit and ran to his sister he was only 4'5. He hugged his sisters leg and was still silent. "These are my child, Lily and Leo" Misses Pearl announced. Lewis stopped staring and walked towards Lily and Leo. He grabbed Lily's hand and kissed it "Madam" He announced. Lily glared at him angrily "Would you be willing to drink the blood of a boy your age?" He asked. Lily was still Silant "I'd be willing to pay you two both" He told them trying to get them to talk. Lily Sighed "I'm Listening" Lily replied. Lewis looked at Leo "I'd be willing to give this young man any Toy in the world he wants" He told Leo. It was Quiet for a few moments "Leo is a boy of few words, And besides he wont waste his breath" Lily Told Lewis. Leo grabbed Lewis'es sleeve "A new Usagi?" Leo asked Lewis, Lewis nodded his head and smiled "And what would you want Lily?" He asked. Lily laughed, "That I will think of over time, and by the time the job is done my mind will be made up, and if you cannot pay the price I will take your soul as a payment" Lily warned Lewis "I'm not like the other little girls" She finished. Lewis nodded his head. "Its a deal then" Lewis replied. Quick Translation note: "A new Usagi?" Usagi means Bunny in Japanese. Since Leo is obviously doesn't really give nicknames at this point he calls his stuffed bunny's Usagi. In japan people shorten it to Usa or Usa-Chan. This example has been used by Honey senpai in OHSHC. ------------------- ![]() CLICK THIS LINK OR DIE | |
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Animegurl
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L & L Go to school The next morning Lily and Leo went down to the play hall as usual but an old maid told them that there parents would like to see them. When Lily and Leo had gotten to the library hall were there parents were most of the day a long pink messy wig was on the floor under it was a tank top that had a star in the middle and a circle around it, but it looked like sleeves were somewhat attacked to it, Next to it was a black Turtle neck shirt and white jeans underneath just like the one beside it. Mr pearl handed Leo the turtle neck with jeans and Misses Pearl handed the other outfit to lily. "Your name is now Lumina" Misses pearl told Lily, "Your name is now David" Mr pearl told Leo. Lily and Leo knew that today there mission began, they went to there rooms to change and each one carried a sun umbrella. They went back to the library after eating breakfast they're parents told them that they would arrange for a school bus to come to the mansion later on this year but for now they had to walk to school and walk home from school. "Whats school?" Leo asked, "Its were children go to learn" Mr pearl told Leo "But they go by age there so you'll be in the first grade" Mr pearl added "Can I bring my Usagi?" Asked Leo Mr pearl nodded and smiled at his son. Lily glared at her mother "and what grade am I in Mother?" Lily asked. "Your in the 9Th grade, which means your in high school" Misses pearl told her daughter. Lily picked up Leo and left the mansion. Lily knew very well what school was, and were it was. But it was her first time out. And 5 minutes into the walk to school Leo had fallen asleep while she was carrying him. It was only 7:30 currently right now Lily would have been changing into her clothes. They finally got there the K-11Th grade. She woke up leo and walked him to his class room. She took a sun umbrella from her backpack "Use this every time your outside David!" Lily warned Leo, Leo nodded his head and went in the class room. When he got there it was very noisy he took a seat in a desk that was not taken it was in the corner of the room, he opened his desk and it was empty so it was okay for him to sit there. He put his back pack down along with the sun umbrella and stared at the children who were screaming and playing he took out his Usagi and started Nawing at the button eye. then after a while someone pushed him out the desk and took his usagi. he started at the person who did it, it was an idiot who clearly was over weight and had a buzz cut "ha ha look who plays with toys, are you a boy or a girl?" He teased Leo started at him and was silent then the bully tore a button eye off of Usagi. at that moment Leo got up and went to the other side of the room and got a marker. The bullys had forgotten about Leo and threw his bunny rabbit that was now missing an eye, and an arm. When Leo got back he got started at his usagi "...No one hurts my Usagi but me...and that was my last one until my job is done" Leo whispered to himself he glared at the bully and jumped on his back and wrote "Fat ass" on his cheek. then slipped the marker into the bully's hand then the bully punched him. but at that moment the teacher came in "Robert!" She yelled she went over to him and grabbed his ear "You should know better by now since you've been held back 3 times that hurting other students is not okay" the teacher yelled "B-But he drew on my face!" He cried. Leo snickered and started writing the ABC's in horrible handwriting (faking it) "D...B...What comes after B?" He asked himself out loud. The teacher glared at the bully "I doubt he would have since he cant even write the ABC's correctly come with me we're going to the prince able!" She yelled. Leo went back to his desk and stared at his bunny rabbit "Usagi" he whispered to himself. On the other side of the school was the high school part. Lily was in all of the victoms classes. she took out a picture of the boy and looked for him, she found him he was in the front of the class so she took a seat in back of him and put the picture away. This boy had Black hair and green eyes. Lily stared at him he turned around "Uh...Hi?" He greeted, "Hello" Lily replyed "Are you new here? I've never seen you before" "Yes, I just moved here with my family" Lily replyed "well whats your name?" He asked "Li...Lumina" she replyed "I'm Krey" He replyed "So Pink hair? thats a bold choice" He remarked "I guess you could say my parents picked it out" she replyed. Then the teacher came in she had gray hair and wore a yellow dress and red shoes "Okay class calm down its time to start" the teacher told the class. Lily bit her lip. Leo let a tear run down his cheek. and the story really begins from here. ------------------- ![]() CLICK THIS LINK OR DIE | |
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Animegurl
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L and L Child Mafia extra Leo laid down in his bed holding his bunny rabbit. A main came in with a cup of hot coco he took it and looked at the marshmallows. "..." he mumbled. "Is something the matter Master Leo?" she asked. He turned his head. "I...wanted...the...USAGI MARSHMELLO HOT COCO!!" he yelled throwing the cup at the women she screamed. "If you bleed to death its not my fault," Leo told the maid who was already bleeding to death. Then another one came in with a hot coco with bunny marshmallows in it. He started at the maid, "I...have...a...fever you idiot...I want to sleep...damn you!" He whimpered covering his face with a blanket. "Make sure no one bothers me" he whispered the maid nodded and left the room. Then Lily came in with a stack of books and threw them on Leo's bed. "I'll read you some books since your--" "GET OUT!!" Leo yelled. "...Okay" Lily replied backing away. "Wait... can you read me the usagi story?" he asked. This message was edited by Animegurl on May 24 2009. ------------------- ![]() CLICK THIS LINK OR DIE | |
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H a r u h i x3
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If you only want positive comments then how are you going to make your writing better? The point of accepting comments is to improve your writing from the comments others post.
Anyway, it's not bad so far. I would suggest spacing out your paragraphs. For example, the rule in writing is to indent, or use the enter button for the computer, once a new person speaks. For example, in the last chapter, I edited it for you: quoteYou're also forgetting a lot of your punctuation. Anyway, aside from that, you're doing very well. A lot of dialogue, but you explain what's happening through their dialogue. Keep going. ;3 ------------------- | |
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Animegurl
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Well I mean by nice is that when I get tips everyone makes such a big deal about how bad I suck at something in my writing. But thank you for the tip, I forget a lot to space between when the characters talk.
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AnimeFreak
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Awesome story Yuuki. Keep writing.
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Anime Ashley
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Amazing plot, it so fits you. Keep the writing coming.
------------------- Have you ever had one dream that seems to ruin your life? If not, why not read all about it?
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L and L "learn fun ways to kill" Lily had taken Leo to the School's Libary after school. She told him that he could play with the stuffed animals in the 1-3 grade books. But Lily came to try and find out some info and the victim. She found the Year book Ile. "2001....2003....Damn it where is the Year book for last year?" Lily whispered to herself "I need some Info, just a little bit to learn some more about this one" She thought to herself. Then Leo tugged on her shirt. "What is it Leo?" asked Lily "Book" Leo told her holding out a book that read "Fun ways to Kill" with a man dancing with a woman while he stabbed his hands with 2 knifes. "Why the hell was this in the kids ile?!" Yelled Lily "Shhh!" Yelled the librarian. Lily glared at her and then went to a table in the back of the Iibary with Leo. She began to read though the Pages "Poision, Stabbing, Shooting, this is all armature" Lily spoke reading though the top parts of the pages. Then they got to the back, it had a picture of a person being killed at a party by drowning in the punch bowl "Another way to kill so you can get your enjoyment out of it is to kill at a party, at a party it makes it easier, you could drown the person in the Toilet, Sink, drink Bowl, Or tub, or you can try many other things like killing everyone at the party but that would be much harder" Lily read. "Thats not a bad Idea" Lily remarked closing the book Leo looked at her with confusion. "Think Leo, with my Hypnosius singing voice, and your poisonous Bite this could be over sooner than we though" Lily told Leo. Leo Blinked "Risky" Leo replied "Well aren't you awful TALKATIVE today Leo!!" ------------------- ![]() CLICK THIS LINK OR DIE | |
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ilovenintendo
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Will there be more?
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