Is it possible to make a story in this forum out of my life on neoseeker I think it would be pretty good?

Hey, I'd certainly read that! That's probably cool-just about anything's fair game really!

Which reminds me, I gotta get back to work on all my stories here...been doing nothing but FAQs lately.

Thanks for your help I will start now.

someone good at writing please give me some hints about how to organize a narration between different characters at different times in the story? for example, for one instance im talking about aura and magic, and for another im going for the kid with bakken. how do you organize two different narrations into a neat single narration that sounds cohesive?

*im refering to my threat Star Chronicles: the story here, please read and comment on it*

I don't really understand the question - are two separate characters trying to give an account of something (narration), and are you trying to mold those two accounts together?

molding the two separate accounts together into one story. basically, how do u make a RP where everyone's talking about their own story into one story.

a very good example is lord of the rings, where tolkien had done a godly job of narrating separate accounts of frodo and sam/aragorn and others/gandolf and pippin into one hell of a good story. see what i mean? frodo's story and aragorn's story has nothing to do with each other and they rarely over lap and yet when you read the book it feels so cohesive.

Well, in LotR, Tolkien essentialy has all of the characters working towards the same goal which is what causes the 'cohesion' between the characters. In the end, the ultimate goal is to destroy the one ring and defeat Sauron. Although the stories are completely different, they all tie together because of that goal. Then the different plights and quests the encounter on their own make the story better overall, because it gives each side of the story it's individuality. However, you can't strive too far from what the characters are striving for to begin with.

well my threads up it's a acrostic poem any rates?

This message was edited by thepower on May 01 2005.

Here is a rough idea for a story:

School girl Jessica Cross is the average private school goer in a small town called Cathedral. Her life is basically normal, yet lacks the loving care of a mother in favor of a cruel hand of a father, who just happens to be mangled in some sort of fanatical cult. When her sixteenth birthday rolls around, it seems that things are getting more crazier then they once had been. Encountering a girl named Raven and falling into the twisted coils of her world, Jessica might just find herself doing what no ordinary girl ever dreamt of doing: Saving the world from an apocalypse they didn’t see coming.

Jessica Cross
Our “Heroine.” Caught in the clutches of a fate that just isn’t meant for her (according to herself of course), Jessica comes face to face with Raven and spirals into a twisted world where everyone she once trusted now fears her and those who she hated now may be her only “salvation.”

Jason Cross
The Barer of the Cross, and father of Jessica. He is one of the gifted of the cult, and may have a hand in what is happening to his daughter.

Raven
A girl close to Jessica’s age whose quiet, and rather doll like in appearance tend to hide a massive enigma that might reveal something important, or bring about something catastrophic.

The Sabbat of the Blue Rose
A rather twisted cult that deals with the warping of the human mind, and manipulation of the spirit. They are linked to a massive number of homicides, but due to a great deal of connections and money it seems that they are able to thwart the government, the police, and even the Vatican.

hmmm got it final destination x.

any one like my poems?

quote lunarelve

someone good at writing please give me some hints about how to organize a narration between different characters at different times in the story? for example, for one instance im talking about aura and magic, and for another im going for the kid with bakken. how do you organize two different narrations into a neat single narration that sounds cohesive?

*im refering to my threat Star Chronicles: the story here, please read and comment on it*

I'm not the best, but like Bakura said try and keep events equal. Don't say one thing in one set up, and then have a setting with another character that contradicts it. Make sure you make it obvious what character you are changing the POV over too also, rather then leaving it obscure and muddled.

Like say...


First piece of narration is the two characters dancing.
Second piece is of the third character shortly before that.
dang, how can I shorten this to a short and sweet example...

Okay two paragraph time!

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Richard and Samantha were dancing across the ball room floor. Their form was perfect, and it was obvious by the way the two looked at each other that they were perfectly in love with one another also. That waltz they shared bringing them sweeping across the room past the the table where the drinks and food sat, along with a more intent watcher.

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Samuel watched the two lovebirds waltz past the table. The white gown of Samantha swaying so perfectly, and glittering with the diamonds that decorated it. His heart skipping several beats, while the air could not escape from his lungs. The way the people applauded those two, and their love was slowly driving him insane.

quote lunarelve

molding the two separate accounts together into one story. basically, how do u make a RP where everyone's talking about their own story into one story.

a very good example is lord of the rings, where tolkien had done a godly job of narrating separate accounts of frodo and sam/aragorn and others/gandolf and pippin into one hell of a good story. see what i mean? frodo's story and aragorn's story has nothing to do with each other and they rarely over lap and yet when you read the book it feels so cohesive.

Hmm I am actually dropping by as I have been interested in sharing my poems here. I have spoken out at several places (clubs, cafes, and the sort) and have gotten some positive feedback from many and was thinking of starting a thread for some. Problem is my poems are a bit graphic and possibly offensive to some. My purpose of course is not to offend but to mearly speak what is in my heart and hope others would listen. So I am wondering if I make it known my intentions are not to offend, and bleep out some words then would that be okay?

I'm pretty sure that's fine, might want to put a Rated: M or Mature or something just as a warning, but there's been pretty graphic stuff in this forum already....