Woah nice introduction

wow at first I thought the girl and her partner was malyene and lucario but im not sure now

I said on the fourth from last sentence, she is Adama and Lucario. Xenocrates has a shiny Lucario, if you wern't sure.

Boo--Xo*

Nice introduction, Boo. I'm hooked on this one already.

Yes this is a very good start. This may become a very very good story.

Just a small introduction of my writing

The torch flickered in the floating holster. It emitted a circle of light, which bounced off the stone cave wall. It was blacker than night outside the projected glow. Scuttles came from just in front of the walking man, as Pokemon not used to penetrating luminescence fled from it. This place only saw the light when this man walked along it, which he did rarely. Xenocrates was walking through the cave, mentally holding the torch in front of him. The man he was looking for was deep inside this rocky passage. Lux, his partner, was walking beside him, mentally scouting for dangers ahead. There had been none so far, but this place was infested with danger. Both of them were both perfectly alert, so if something did come across them, it would hardly touch either of them. Xenocrates looked at Lux, who still had scratches from the fight with his opposite, Adama's Lucario. Suddenly, Lux froze up, and an Ariados leapt down from the ceiling. Instantly, it was crippled and concussed. Xenocrates faced Lux. They had both released Aura from their palms on opposite sides of the spider. It was severely damaged. They turned towards the inner depths of the cave, and continued.
There wasn't any trouble for the rest of the trek. The torch dispelled most pokemon, and the heavily injured spider lying on the floor closer to the mouth of the cave deterred the rest. After traveling several miles into the heart, the two bearers of the Aura reached the heart, where they met with who they had been searching for.

This message was edited by Dajay on Jul 10 2008.

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Haha Paramore. Dajay is an emo girl

Okay! Up and running wooples! *Dances stupidly*
I don't think Chapters are going to work though... :/

She found herself appearing in an alleyway which she was very familiar to. Her Lucario padded gently to the drain cover and closed his eyes to concentrate, his paw glowing with a dark aura. The drain was immediately engulfed in an small black hole, and Lucario stepped to one side as it grew to stand as a portal. "Miss Adama." He waved his paw towards the whisping door, brushing her burning skin. She smirked and walked through, "Izuri," she called, summoning her Lucario to follow. The portal imploded into nothingness, giving no sign of where they were, or where they had been. The cave lit up in their presence, and she continued down the long natural corridor. The heat as becoming unbearable to Izuri, but Adama urged him to keep going with a short glare. They saw where the heat ended, a thin line which stopped it completely. She walked through after Izuri, who had rushed to be free. She looked up and stopped walking; "I did as you said." She smirked; "what's next?"
It looked down to her and smiled; "such a clever girl. Yet not very observant." She looked at him confused, but it just looked to Izuri; "You saw it did you not?"
"No sir. For I do not know what you speak of." He said calmly, but the pokemon that stood before them tossed him to the ceiling, then let him fall. Adama winced at the bump, but she knew she dare not move. "You're lying." It spat, as Izuri lifted himself to his feet. He protested innocently; "Maybe if you told me what I have seen then perhaps I could have an opinion." The pokemon glared at him, "It's in him you fool, I may not possess the ability to enlighten Aura but I know it's in the boy. A great force it would be if I were to harness it..."
Adama bowed; "So you wish for me to retrieve it?" She smirked. The pokemon nodded as she continued; "and by what means am I to do so?"
The pokemon sighed deeply; "Any means necessary, whether he is taken to my realm or not."
Adama nodded, smirking; "As you wish. Izuri!" She snapped, and he bowed and followed her out. As soon as they were out, Izuri began mumbling his curses on the cruel being. Not even he could have such a cruel insensitive personality. "Hush now my friend. It won't be long until I am rid of it."
The Lucario looked up at the same sky as Adama was, but one star in particular shone brightly for them when their Aura connected, and it shone down at the town. Blinding light flooded the area to keep everyone immobilised, only two others in the town could move now, and that's how they would hunt them down.

The Chapters are... GONE!

No-one really knew how old Nestor was, not that many people actually knew Nestor, but he was obviously very old. His face was almost one large wrinkle, meaning his face was thick with grooves and indents, turning it almost into a piece of art. He lived down here in a cave, supplied entirely by his pokemon. As it was so cold here, he wore a large garment, a mix and match of furs. It was hard to see what it was made of exactly, but it definitely was warm. He stood up, noticing the new arrival, and his torch.
"Who is that? Xenocrates?" The old man stumbled to his feet, then shuffled over to the young man. Having spent all of his recent life in darkness, his sight was very bad, but had amazing hearing. His arms lifted up, and the fur glided against Xenocrates' face.
"Yes Nestor. It's me."
"What do you want boy?" He had a very strange voice. Soft but gravelly.
"I need to know more."
"More about?"
"The Aura. Adama escaped again. That happens whenever I catch up to her. And Lux lost to Izuri again." Lux seemed ashamed at this.
"I see..." Nestor was one of the most knowledgeable people on the aura, and the safest for Xenocrates to contact with. "Well, you really need to concentrate on the main advantage you have over Adama. Speed. You can generate aura much faster than her. Use that to your advantage."
"He's right." Lux told Xenocrates.
"And as for Lux. He needs to use more physical attacks. Get in there harder and faster than her."
"Nestor, I need to know more about the aura." Xenocrates was firm
"Xenocrates. We can't speak for long. Just know this. The Aura and the body are fighting each other for personality. The Aura is more powerful and therefore is dominant. If your, or Adama's, Aura is removed, your personalities will severely change."
"Why can't we speak for-" Xenocrates was cut off as an Earthquake split the ground open below Nestor. He fell down the crack. Xenocrates ran to the edge and looked down. Blackness.

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"Miss!" Izuri suddenly yelled, but she could feel it coming too. They both jumped back repeatedly to escape the cracking hole in the floor that was chasing them. Even when they split up, the crack produced another. "This is no ordinary earthquake!" She yelled, as she looped a full circle, the crack colliding into itself, so it could not stretch futher. "Perhaps we are summoned?" Izuri said, walking onto the ring Adama had formed. Adama closed her eyes, waiting for the drop. She searched for an end to the earth's damage, and shouted for them to jump when it was about to smash on a new floor.
"Perfect." Izuri snorted, which Adama realised why when she opened her eyes. "Well here we are again!" She laughed. "My master must have done this on purpose, if I can beat you before I can beat you again."
"You didn't beat me. I'm still standing." He snapped, but she just smirked; "Precisely."
He frowned, but she decided to attack while his guard was down. He held his hand up at amazing speed, deflecting it with ease, but it shot towards the Lucario. Izuri jumped out of the way quickly, but the other was even faster. Izuri looked to Adama worriedly, but was punched down to the ground. Adama threw her hands out towards Xenocrates and his Lucario, throwing them backwards with one mental push. Izuri thanked her with a quick glance, then put himself into a fighting stance. Lux leapt forward at Izuri, but his concentration sent him high in the air, dodging through the punch like a ghost. He held himself up on the ceiling, smirking at the tiny Lucario beneath him. Adama took a glance at him, but it was enough time to be sent souring. She flipped herself so she could land on her feet, charging an Aura sphere, but he did too, and his speed gave him more time to charge up to as powerful as her ones. The two spheres collided, pushing on one another, but Adama smirked. She pulled back on her aura, sucking it back to let the other one fly at her. She stopped it with the palm of her hand, full of psychic energy. She took one glance at the boy at the opposite side of the room, then pulled on the aura. He jolted forward as if tied to the sphere. "Oh this will be fun." She cackled. She tugged repeatedly, and noticed the two Lucario had stopped fighting. They stared at him, Izuri laughing. Lux set off to attack Adama, but Izuri pinned him against the wall, not even struggling to keep him there. She suddenly took a firm grip on the aura, and pulled harshly, sending him to the floor. She walked up, waving the aura in his face. "Bet you didn't know that could happen." She let it go and it swooped into the weak body. She then lifted him with pyschic energy. "I knew you lied before, it's in you!" She lashed her other hand at him, then made a gripping claw. Xenocrates immediatly started yelling in pain, and she just smirked at what she was inflicting. The blue string which she was pulling out from him ravelled into a ball in front of her. He dropped to the ground lifelessly, but still alive. His conscience dead, but his body still active. He watched her hatefully as she waltzed over to her Lucario, "Take it too. It might be useful to master's uses." She winked, as Izuri headbutted Lux into nconsciousness. She touched Izuri with her spare hand, and teleported them to the street alleyway again.

Bumage that could mean something scary

As Adama left, Xenocrates got onto his feet. He started to chuckle. It resonated with a soulless, deep hum. A Spinirak glided down from the ceiling to see what was going on. Xenocrates grabbed its head and squeezed. Its body went limp with death as its bones were crushed. He looked at his hand. The aura was completely gone. That was good. He closed his eyes, rekindling himself. Black light resonated from his head. As it reached the ceiling, many pokemon fell from up there, completely paralyzed. They would not get up. Xenocrates face had change. His face was a deathly white, juxtaposed against jet black hair, shooting straight up. His eyes were just black. The Body was back in control. That wretched Theophylaktos was finally gone! He walked over to the crevasse the earthquake had made. He spat down it, then jumped.
It took approximately one second to reach the bottom. He spread out his body to slow down primarily, but just before he reached the stone floor, dug his foot into the side. It crumbled, slowing down Xenocrates. He landed without harm.
"Old Man! Nestor!" He called out, along with the soulless hum. The last word he uttered with scorn. Ultimate scorn. The wise old man walked up to him, then froze as he saw him.
"So, you're back. Bad luck for humanity."
"You'd better thank that girl! She got rid of Theophylaktos for me!" Xenocrates laughed
"Adama..." Nestor stepped back.
"Well, goodbye old man!" Xenocrates dealt a swift and powerful Roundhouse kick. Nestor flew off across the crevasse. Xenocrates jumped to one side of the crack and jumped. He jumped off the other wall, and then wall jumped all the way back up to the cave. To seek revenge.

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Uh oh revenge is taking part in the story

Izuri dropped the yellow Lucario onto it's face, it lay there unconscious. Adama knelt on one knee, resting and arm on the other knee. She looked up at the enormous caged pokemon, smirking victoriously as it glared back down at her. "I got it."
It held out it's hand, and she levitated the ribboned aura to it. She glanced at Izuri, who was smirking, mentally preparing himself to attack. It raised the aura to it's face and breathed it in gently. Adama started laughing nastily. "Now you're mine."
She flung herself at the mighty pokemon, but it just flicked it's glowing hand and she flew back. An awakening Lux and Izuri charged up an Aura sphere each, but it lifted it's hand again to throw several rocks towards them, causing the Aura spheres to explode in the pyramid of rocks.
"You think I'd be oblivious to the fact that your Aura is more powerful than the boy's?" It roared, as she picked herself up. "His is useful for one thing, and that's obtaining yours!"
She watched it charge up and Aura sphere, if it reached her, he could attach onto her aura, if she deflected, it could still be taken.
Now what. She backed herself into a corner.
A small string of aura shot at her and wrapped around her chest, she was yanked to fall on her back then dragged closer to it. It pulled on the string again, lifting her chest off the ground. She screamed as she felt her sanity being scraped out of her, she clenched her stomach in the vain hope that she could hold on. The grip suddenly loosened as her back hit the floor, her body smiled as she watched the pokemon drop an aura on her. "You can give the boy that one again. It's not like I need it."
It slipped through the barrier that had once stopped it. Izuri managed to hop out of the top, yanking Lux out too.
"Miss!" he spotted her lay on the floor weakly, just like how she had left Xenocrates. He raised her head off the cold floor, as she opened her eyes slowly. "That's my Master's Aura!" Lux growled angrily. Adama sat up and smiled; "So we've got to get it back to him." Izuri coughed angrily; "We worked so hard for that!"
Lux's fists clenched, but Adama just spoke even more calmly; "We stole it, it has to go back."
"I'll help you." Lux nodded, knowing she was being genuine.
"But Miss, how are we gonna get you through that though Miss?" Izuri pointed at the Aura barrier, she knew she couldn't use Xenocrates' Aura, he'd never get it back.
"Keep it by you. It might work." Lux suggested; "What does it do to you if you try?"
Izuri worried; "Miss it could kill you. Let us take it, we'll find you a way out."
Lux agreed, "My master is very clever, he will work something out."
"You two will just look like rare, wild pokemon. You will be targeted, especially you." She pointed to Lux, being shiny he was hunted. She stood up, and held the Aura close. "Miss don't."
She just walked through, breathing gently. She opened her eyes to realise it had worked. Izuri sighed with relief, and ran through, Lux following. "Right, lets go." She giggled. Letting the Lucario check the vicinity before they set off.

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There was no way to track him down with the Aura in Adama's pocket. They had spent hours searching, unable to split up. "There!" Lux pointed up at a rooftop, and Izuri blasted an Aura sphere at him, but it blew through him. "Aura won't work when there is nothing to hit!" She gasped, as he flew down. "You again!" He yelled at her, throwing himself towards her. She backed up nervously, but managed to hold him back with the one power she had left, pyschic. Her energy became drained, she let go and the Lucario had to hold him back with their physical strength. He tensed up, pulling himself away from the two. He appeared in front of her, grabbing hold of her neck and pushing her to the floor. She gasped for air as she felt for the aura. "Stop wriggling! It won't take long." Lux ran to her side; "Master what are you doing?"
"Touch me and I'll snap her!" He yelled as Izuri hesitated with what to do. She glanced at her partner and smiled slightly. She pressed her hand into his face, letting the aura suck into him. She saw his eyes come to life, a spark ignited inside. He hesitated slightly, blinking himself awake. He looked down at her, she stared at him nervously. "So I caught you!"
"No Master!"
Izuri flew at Xenocrates, but Lux held him back; "Look at her Aura!"
He listened to his trusted partner, and closed his eyes. "It's not there. Which means-" He opened his eyes to look at her, she was shaking and breathing quickly, he let go and apologised. She sighed and opened her eyes, taking the hand he held out.

This message was edited by Boo123 on Jul 14 2008.

Have you read what I put on yours!?
Do not let that comment get to your head! It was a nasty comment and whoever they are needs to get a life.

Boo--Xo*