quote SpiritMafia

posting from my ps3. my pc is getting fixed. was supposed to be done today but now theyre saying not till tomorrow. will give another heads up if theres another delay. im typing with the sixaxis so i obviously cant rp like this cause its taken like 15 min to do this post

quote bobbpugg5

{give feedback on this}

quote bobbpugg5

... a pair of identical white masks, with the image of Guy Fawkes on it. In case your not familiar with it, it was the mask seen on V for Vendetta which I am clearly ripping off. Raven looks over at ...

Tim... Wolf?

Do we just make up people these days?

You can RP as yourself here in TWG. I would eventually like to do that, but I think I'll wait a while for that to happen.

hyp: I really enjoyed the rp i thought it was well written and turned alot of things on their head (i apologise again btw)

bob: i dunno i just think it wasnt really my thing. I enjoed the in character writing but not the fact that the rp seemed to be more about you than your character. So it could be difficult for people to feud with you


another RP up, this is probably my favourite of the ones ive done. With there being a Raven cult ill probably turn this guys more into tweeners than i have been doing with some "con artist" rps any feedback?

New Daniels RP posted, and because I'm in a feedbacky mood, first 3 people to give me feedback get feedback on their latest RP.

Blodejob: Good rp, I like what you are doing with Daniels, only thing that hit me was the length of some of the paragraphs, I was like SPACE PLEASE. Other than that it was a decent rp (Y).

Oh yeah best you've ever done, just don't go *bleep*ing crazy like you always do or you will ruin all your hard work.

This message was edited by Jaffers on Jun 04 2008.

blode: That was *bleep*ing epic. i love everything you're doing with the character are the bible bits real or made up? I think this is a main event character and probably the best written RP at the moment

Wow Blode, that was the best RP of yours I've ever read. I really like how you've established the relationship between Undertaker and Daniels, a puppet with his master. And btw, you don't have to give me feedback on my Nigel RP, but eventually you might have to read a Cabana RP.

quote Fade To Black

blode: That was *bleep*ing epic. i love everything you're doing with the character are the bible bits real or made up? I think this is a main event character and probably the best written RP at the moment

Bible quotes are real, and in case anyone was interested, it took me a half an hour to generate one *bleep*ing sentence in Hebrew (what I used for Daniels speaking in tongues).

Anyway, Feedback time.

Jaffycakes: I was very meh on this RP. It seemed very linear to me, kind of like insult opponent A, put self over, insult opponent B, leave. That's not necessarily a bad thing, I just feel that it watered down, what was otherwise a solid top-notch RP effort. Overall, still very good, but with a lot of room for improvement.

Fade To Black: I have two glaring problems with this RP. The first is markup. There's no way to distinguish where the wrestler's name is and where the dialogue starts. There are two ways to amend this, one being to bold the wrestler's name, and the second being to make the wrestler's name in color and the dialogue in black. The second problem I had was grammar. Whenever you say "I" referring to yourself, it's capitalized; I understand not doing it in normal posts, but in an RP, it's important that grammar be correct. There was also the occasional spelling error, but other then that the RP was pretty good. I like how you used Las Vegas as a backdrop, and O'Haire's rant on the poker loser was great, although the one criticism I have of where you're going with the angle is that it seems a LOT like the Mattitude angle a couple years back, with O'Haire as Hardy and Helms as Moore. I'm interested to see where you're going with these two, so keep up the good work and put the RP's in Word first and just spell check them.

That last bolded bit was just a general piece of advice for all roleplayers. It sucks to lose an RP on Neo because your internet goes haywire, and it's generally much less likely to happen on Word, plus it has a better spellchecker.

Okay Blode, Cabana has had his shenanigans so it's time for you to review please .

WMF: Wow...that was great. I love how you can be completely "I'm gonna rip your head off" serious with Nigel, but then be the completely wacky, fun guy with Cabana. It definitely shows your versatility as an RP'er. The only flaws I could find were minor grammar errors (you refer to it as both McDonald's and McDonalds) and that it seemed a little jumpy at the beginning. Other then that, a solid RP, and nice job.

Lol I noticed the Family Guy thing... That was kind of annoying... but it was a good RP.

Its kind of hard to RP guys... for the fact that my compy died... And My header was on it... and I lost the website for which I made it so I could get the picture onto neo... so if someone could supply a URL It would be really appreciated

Hmm, to further establish the silliness of Cabana, I might just pick up El Generico as a manger.

Ol`e ol`e ol`e ol`e! Ol`e ol`e!

The greatest thing I have ever seen.

"This is gay. Let's get outta here." I lol'd again .

Expect to see that vid in one of my RP's.