Maybe you could cut down on the dimensions and make it look a bit cleaner? It just looks odd right now. Not trying to nitpick. I like it alot, but when viewed this large.......

My main problems with the sprite, although extremely well done overall are thus:

1) The fringe here. Specifically, the outline.



2) The mouth looks a little bit strange with his facial expression.

That is one scary person. Not as in "dude, he could so rip me apart," but as in "dude, that looks... almost human..."

The mouth is a good deal of what gives off that disturbing factor.

Mouth is.....uhhhh....let's just say "off"

The mouth in general is far too low in relation to the nose as well as rather small (I also dislike this in the reference).

I suggest getting rid of the line you used to define the nose's shape, and sticking with the shades you're using for shading to define it instead.

Also, Cloud's face in the reference is at an angle while yours is straight on. You need to lengthen his jawline and extend his chin.

And you're pillowing the eyes. I recommend just using the two darkest teal shades you're currently using + black for the eyes instead of overloading it with shades.

But it's not really FE style, so I can't really say much.

Anyway,
Old Hawk -> New Hawk


This message was edited by GhostMember on Sep 14 2009.

It has something to do with the fact that his mouth vaguely resembles a tilde. Human mouths should not do this.

They are. His mouth looks squiggly.

Ciel from Tsukihime.
Top left: Default.
Top right: Cosplay.
Bottom left: Ciel's natural look"
Bottom right: Senpai isn't senpai without her glasses!



This message was edited by GhostMember on Sep 18 2009.

Oh foul killer of threads.